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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 5, 2008 20:51:56 GMT -5
^_^
Though I doubt Ran would like being spotted hehehe...I think that since Sandra is similiar to him and has the ability she would detect him in some way by maybe a heat signature or whatever "third eye" some people mention ^_^
Uhh...let me grab the floor plans....
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Post by Deleted on Jul 5, 2008 20:55:27 GMT -5
Sort of like beta reading right now then, which is always a helpful thing.
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 5, 2008 21:26:36 GMT -5
Well they're not so much rules as they are guidelines....like the pirate code ^_^
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 5, 2008 21:30:48 GMT -5
Tahaha assurance ^0^
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 5, 2008 21:40:39 GMT -5
Hehehe, envy all around ^0^ Hope Sandra doesn't mess up accidently and gets herself and Ran in trouble ^0^ You get reviews here too ^0^ Could always flip flopping, putting it on FF.Net first, then here ^0^
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Post by Deleted on Jul 5, 2008 21:47:04 GMT -5
Ahh yes, Scaring when off duty that led to his rumors of cheating. Love the exchange at the end there. Trying to keep it professional and all but at the same time being put into a situation that they could potentially both enjoy and yet cause problems at the same time so yeah! If next bit is your best part then really forward to it.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 6, 2008 19:40:57 GMT -5
Monsterade! Hmm, overall it was a good foundation chapter for revealing their feelings towards one another. Ran's the open flirt, whereas Sandra's the more reluctant one to come right out and admit to anything aside from having fun. I think the scene in the break room may have moved a little TOO fast as it just said t me "slow scene" but nonetheless, it's only a rough draft, and can be revised easily from here. I think overall though the general mood was properly set and maintained throughout the chapter.
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 6, 2008 19:43:32 GMT -5
Tah ^0^ Thought so for an accident ^0^
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 6, 2008 19:50:08 GMT -5
Have the feeling "so, the drama" has passed in your house at one time or another ^0^
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 7, 2008 18:58:03 GMT -5
You and me both ^0^
Nice filler ^_^ exaggeration maybe ^_^ Though Ran would probably be more upset considering he trained the blue rug ^0^
Sandra the assurer ^0^
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 7, 2008 19:10:27 GMT -5
Ahh relationship focus ^_^
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 7, 2008 19:23:50 GMT -5
Oh? ^_^
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 7, 2008 19:34:52 GMT -5
Goofiness can be anything, even situational so it has allot of le-way ^0^
Fluff? ^_^
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 7, 2008 19:39:17 GMT -5
^0^
Ahh romance...more difficult than people think ^_^ Doesn't happen all at once ^_^
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Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 7, 2008 20:21:03 GMT -5
Oh?
Ah ^_^
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