Subject: A Poem. Whoa.

[AvistheCrow]

You complain that
I am dragged down
inside a maze
of equity---
you never stop
to see my signs
read into my
reality.

You expect me
to take your words
and hold them as
a solemn truth---
when all your lies
and watching eyes
were done with me
up on the roof.

Expecting me
to hold my tongue,
you let me be
a playing pawn
and in exchange
for all my help
you left me with
my dream withdrawn.

Now I am here
with broken hands,
refusing to move
my cold feet
from where I stand
upon your stoop
'til you see my
reality.




You know, I am getting an unusual amount of vindicated feelings writing Randall-thought poetry. You anger me, Fur Rug.

Please critique to massive amounts.

[RandallBoggs]

Ok, lets see, I'm taking creative writing, I should know this. I know this ^_^.

I think the first is about equality and in/outside appearence....

I think this refers to Randall having to keep the "Secret" Waternoose gave him.

Third one is false lies...

Exile.....

Good, nearly dark, emotion ^_^

[Mirage]

You. Are. An AWESOME POET!! ;D

This and the other one apply not only to Randall's life but to other characters too. Love the rhyme scheme, the word choice, everything..

[lizardgirl]

Ditto to everything that Mirage said! Yeah, a very dark poem, but a poem worth reading! ;D