Veg
Randall's Friend (800-1999)
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Post by Veg on Aug 24, 2005 17:06:09 GMT -5
I put this up on Fanfic.net, but only Sean reviewed and I can't get the third sequel up! Here it is for you people who didn't read it.
Prologue
It has been a few months since Randall was exiled to the human world. Finding another closet door, he went back to Monstropolis and explained it to Sulley and Mike that it was Mr. Waternoose who had came up with the plan of the whole Scream extractor. After hearing the explanation, Sulley forgave Randall, so did the reluctant Mike Wazowski. Now Randall lives happily in Monstropolis, having a normal life and a new girlfriend. But the normal life is going to change...
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Veg
Randall's Friend (800-1999)
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Post by Veg on Aug 24, 2005 17:08:53 GMT -5
1. The boxRandall Boggs went down to the mailboxes in the apartment building to get his mail. Same old bills, sweepstakes and a box. Something in the box moved. Randall paused and picked it up. It read, TO: RANDALL BOGGS
FROM?
A.O.T.M Botswana, Africa.Randall stared at the address. Where have he seen those initials before? Scratch-scratch-scratch. Randall shook the box. SCRATCH-SCRATCH-SCRATCH! "Let me out of here!" A voice hissed. Grabbing the rest of the mail in his bottom set of arms, Randall took the box with his top arms and raced up to the third floor. "Hey!" A voice said. Randall turned around. A monster, who looked a lot like Schmidt, stood near his door. "What’s that?" He said, pointing. Randall gulped. "Uh...something somebody sent me." Well it’s true! He added to himself. The monster grinned. "Whatever it is, it’s alive. When I was a kid, I used to sneak animals up to my room. Of course my mom always found out and—" He slicked a finger across his throat. Randall cringed. "Hope I get to see it later." Randall was tempted to say, "No way Jose!" but that would have been rude. He raced to his apartment and shut the door. He quickly went to his room, put the box on his bed, got a cookie tin and got out a small card he received last Christmas from Oklahoma City. TO: RANDALL BOGGS
FROM?
CONGRATULATIONS! YOU HAD RECEIVED A FREE MEMBERSHIP TO ALIEN OF THE MONTH.SCRATCH-SCRATCH-SCRATCH!Randall whirled around. The box bulged and then it opened. Oh and Fony, you might like the thing that's inside the box! 
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Post by RandallBoggs on Aug 24, 2005 17:09:40 GMT -5
Oh jeez!
Your Goveg aren't you!
You never said that you did that....wow...hi again again ^_^
Ah...don't worry....I'm hardly reviewed too.
The only thing wrong with the prologue is the word "banished" just replace that with "exiled" and you got it ^_^
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Veg
Randall's Friend (800-1999)
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Post by Veg on Aug 24, 2005 17:30:24 GMT -5
Okay, got it.
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Post by RandallBoggs on Aug 24, 2005 17:34:18 GMT -5
Oh...I remember this heh heh...
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Post by fairlyoddnewyorker on Aug 24, 2005 18:55:21 GMT -5
I read this- Sean suggested it ... Didn't I review? O__o I shall go check ... *wanders off*
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Post by lizardgirl on Aug 25, 2005 6:53:58 GMT -5
Nice start- captivating, to the point, and lures the reader into wanting to read on. Good work! ;D
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Post by RandallBoggs on Aug 25, 2005 16:26:03 GMT -5
I did suggest???
Oh right...because of him...
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