|
Post by mentalguru on Jun 3, 2010 7:03:43 GMT -5
An interesting story Mistica, though it might benefit from some paragraph breaks inbetween people talking and when it changes from Randall to Lillian's persepctive a:
-----
or some other division to break it up.
But it's your story as you said. It was pretty good!
I'll hopefully catch more after my trip too.
I'll still pop in on this board the odd time in my first four weeks (since I'll have SOME internet access, though not a lot to read fanfic and other things), just to show I'm alive.
(I just crushed everyones dreams there, didn't I. LOL. You poor guys, you're the only fanboard I'm going to do this too probably. I might update my livejournal, but other than this and personal emails that would be it.)
|
|
|
Post by mistica0christina on Jun 3, 2010 20:52:47 GMT -5
Thank you and yeah, I know, I kind of should add more paragraph breaks, I've already got a few telling me that...sorry, bad habit with my fics, I've noticed that since I've started doing them, I seem to write more like I'm doing a book as opposed to a fic, I was hoping that since the size of font here on the board was a pretty good size, reading it here would be better as opposed to my site. When I work on my fic, I do it in Microsoft word and do it in paragraphs so that I can check page length on it, I've tried to get into a habit with my fics in order to set a certain number of pages per chapter sort of thing so that I will hopefully avoid writing fics too short (did that with my TNBC stuff and so I do this to avoid it). I'll try that in the future with my other chapters though although I've already posted a few other chapters on my DA page, not sure if it's easier to read there or not but nonetheless, thank you for the input.
|
|
Bampot
Randall's Friend (800-1999)
<3
Posts: 1,204
|
Post by Bampot on Jun 9, 2010 17:21:53 GMT -5
Nice job, Mistica Poor Lillian, but at least Mark doesn't pick on her. Of course, any kind of attention may be better than nothing at all Lol, I think Brendon has been watching toooo much Digimon XD
|
|
|
Post by mistica0christina on Jun 9, 2010 18:21:12 GMT -5
Nice job, Mistica Poor Lillian, but at least Mark doesn't pick on her. Of course, any kind of attention may be better than nothing at all Lol, I think Brendon has been watching toooo much Digimon XD Thank you ;D *sighs* Sadly love is a very complicated thing, especially when it comes to those crushes. I remember the first crush I had...it started in Kindergarden and only lasted until...about sixth grade when I decided to tell the guy that I liked him (through a friend of course) and...well, basically embarressed myself (really embarressed myself actually)...buy yeah, when it seems that you're pretty much invisible to that special guy, any attention is better than none, even if he gets your name wrong. Rofl, oh yeah, way too much, but on a serious note, Brendan (if you kind of couldn't tell) sees himself kind of superior to the banished monsters who pass through the town and since Candi has no problem hanging out with him, he does use her to further prove this superiority...although that is kind of ironic actually...but Candi can't complain, after all, Brendan's rich and buys her whatever she wants...and what girl doesn't love shopping...so their relationship is kind of twisted in a strange way.
|
|
|
Post by mentalguru on Aug 5, 2010 14:11:09 GMT -5
Just to let you know I read the second chapter recently, overall good job etc etc. Plan to read the rest a bit later!
|
|
|
Post by mistica0christina on Aug 5, 2010 23:14:54 GMT -5
Just to let you know I read the second chapter recently, overall good job etc etc. Plan to read the rest a bit later! Oh wow, somebody made a comment! Thank you for reading the second chapter, I went ahead and did put spacing in between characters talking and paragraphs here or there so it made reading easier as you can see. I believe that here, I only have up to five chapters while my DA page does have the sixth one...or at least I think it does. I probably won't be posting up the next ones for awhile since I want to try and post up chapters for my STH fic that I'm coming close to posting up the last of it on my site and I need to try posting it on DA and such since that one is already finished. Hopefully when I'm working on posting that fic, it will maybe give me a chance to write more on the chapters of this one that I haven't posted yet.
|
|
|
Post by TheOnePistol on Oct 18, 2010 0:30:24 GMT -5
Wow, im really liking this! Great Job! ;D Ill be honest, I didtn know you were adding new chapters, i thought you were just putting the ones from FF.net on the here. I just now checked and saw the new chapters. This is awesome!
|
|
|
Post by mistica0christina on Oct 18, 2010 22:58:54 GMT -5
Ill be honest, I didtn know you were adding new chapters, i thought you were just putting the ones from FF.net on the here. I just now checked and saw the new chapters. This is awesome! Thank you but the chapters I had here before ch 7 I had added here first along with those on my DA account, the ones on FF.net were added in much later after what I had here. As for adding the new chapters, I had stopped adding them in order to get some more written so that way I could take my time with adding in new chapters online. I'm planning to make this in similiar length to one of my first finished fics if possible so it's not going to be short, trust me, I'm no where near finished here.
|
|
|
Post by TheOnePistol on Oct 18, 2010 23:04:48 GMT -5
Well, to be honest I'm only on chapter 4, so i've got allot of reading to do, and i really like it so far, I REALLY like that idea of all the banished monsters sneaking into the mall to play arcade games, and Randall played Carnevil. That was funny!. Have you read my story recently?
|
|