Veg
Randall's Friend (800-1999)
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Maxie
Jun 29, 2005 0:04:57 GMT -5
Post by Veg on Jun 29, 2005 0:04:57 GMT -5
Anyone interested in a fanfic where Randall accidently lets a puppy in the monster world?
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Maxie
Jun 29, 2005 10:32:50 GMT -5
Post by lizardgirl on Jun 29, 2005 10:32:50 GMT -5
Awww, sounds sweet! ;D
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Maxie
Jun 29, 2005 11:41:46 GMT -5
Post by pitbulllady on Jun 29, 2005 11:41:46 GMT -5
Sounds sweet, with a lot of potential for humor...you DO know that a certain one-eyed cretin is supposedly VERY phobic of dogs, don't you? You'll just have to be careful that it doesn't come off as too much like the "Who Let The Dogs In" episode of "Foster's...", where Eduardo(who is also purple)finds a puppy and it gets loose in the house, even though it's strictly against the rules for any dogs to be on the premises, since Mr. Herriman is also terrified of canines.
Waaaay back on the old board, we once had a discussion of whether or not Randall would be a "dog person", and what kind of dog he'd have. I figured he probably would be, and would probably be one of those individuals who can sometimes relate to dogs, horses or other animals better than to other monsters, since they don't judge him based on his appearance. If he had a dog, he'd probably be the sort to like those breeds with a "tough" reputation, especially Pit Bull Terriers, since they are an Irish breed(in spite of the "American" tag), they don't give up, and people judge them and hate them based simply upon what they are, not how they act. I'd started to write a fanfic or two, about him finding an abandoned puppy in the swamp during his exile in Louisiana, and at first not wanting anything to do with it, since he would have enough problems trying to care for himself, let alone something else, but lonliness eventually drives him to befriend the puppy. I'd thought of another one where he befriends a former fighting dog, who's supposed to be destroyed because of what she is. In that one, I had him working for a country vet, as repayment for the vet saving HIM after he was badly beaten by the woman in the trailer. Like so many of my ideas, though, it never got off the ground.
pitbulllady
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Veg
Randall's Friend (800-1999)
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Maxie
Jun 29, 2005 23:14:05 GMT -5
Post by Veg on Jun 29, 2005 23:14:05 GMT -5
Okay, here is the first chapter. Read and enjoy!
1. The small spotted mongrel
It was the end of the day at Monsters Inc. Randall Boggs was just standing at the entrance of the scare floor, watching the assistants returning the doors to the big vault. He wasn’t sure why, but today, he was feeling a little jealous. And it wasn’t about the scoreboard, because he was still Top Scarer. It was about…the rooms. ¨I don’t get it!¨ He mumbled. ¨Some of these guys get better kids to scare while I get 5, 4 or 6 year olds! Why is that?¨ Because they are not afraid of dogs. A little voice inside his head told him. ¨I know, I know! ¨ Randall mumbled, walking out. He didn’t want to remember what happened a month ago. It involved an eight year old girl and a Doberman pincer. It was just a quick little scare, but that dog had to jump on him and bite him in different places! Arms, fronds, tail, and close to the throat. Luckily, Sulley came just in time and pulled Randall out before the Doberman could attack again. They got the door shredded and Randall had to stay in the hospital for three days. From that day on, Randall hated dogs. And not just big dogs, even little dogs like Chihuahuas or Beagles. A few monsters sometimes bragged that they entered rooms with Great Danes or Saint Bernard’s and survived. Randall just kept his mouth shut. He didn’t want anyone to know he refused to go in a room that had a little Chihuahua puppy in it! Randall suddenly stopped in front of the entrance of Scare-floor D. A door stood there. A white door with big black spots. Randall would have ignored it, but something was like calling him. He looked to make sure nobody was watching and went in. When he got to the door, he opened it and looked in. No kid on the bed. Nobody was there. Randall shrugged and closed the door. Something cold and wet touched his tail. He looked down and saw a tiny, Dalmatian puppy. Randall yelped and jumped on the door. ¨A dog! ¨ The puppy panted and wagged its tail. Randall growled at it. ¨Get away from me you mongrel! ¨ The puppy sat, still staring at Randall. Randall realised something horrible. If anybody found out about a puppy in the monster world, they’re gonna banish him for sure! There are a few things that are illegal in the Monster world. 1: Letting a kid in the monster world. 2: Coming back after banishment (Only it didn’t count with Randall because Sulley and Mike did it without permission. But if it had been with the city council, that would have been different) But the worst crime of all was…letting an animal from the human world in the Monster world! And for a good reason. They said that these animals carried diseases like rabies or fleas. There was a noise like someone coming in. Randall’s heart started beating faster. Oh great. I’m gonna get caught and there’s a killer dog in front of me! What am I going to do?
That´s only the first chapter. I´m gonna write more soon so don´t worry!
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Maxie
Jun 29, 2005 23:36:13 GMT -5
Post by pitbulllady on Jun 29, 2005 23:36:13 GMT -5
OK...couple of problems(I know you're starting to really despise me by now). I can't imagine Randall being afraid of dogs, Wazowski, yes, since he's a coward anyway. Randall could kill pretty much any dog with one bite. Second, why does the attacking bad dog ALWAYS have to be a Doberman Pinscher(correct spelling-German for "terrier"), a Pit Bull, or a Rottweiler? Dobermans' barks are MUCH worse than their bites; I've never met a Doberman that would have the gumption to attack something like Randall in the first place, and I've met LOTS of Dobermans! Tough dogs, they aren't! Dalmatians are much worse, as far as biting and attacking people go. AND, if Randall is back from the Human World, what's he still doing as a Scarer, when Sulley had the company switch over to Laugh energy? I don't think he'd stoop that low, to humiliate himself just to get some kid to laugh at him, and I don't think Sulley would let him scare kids, either, but that's just me. I can see Randall being reluctant to befriend a dog because that would mean showing a side of him that he doesn't want others to see, a tender, caring side. Can't have his bad-@$$ reputation ruined, now, can he, especially not in front of his former rivals! I can see him not wanting anything to do with one because of the burden involved, financially and time-wise, in caring for a pet, and at first he wouldn't think it was worth the trouble, but I can't see him being afraid of them. In one of the Disney story books they put out, there's a short story about Mike encountering a puppy on a Laugh-gathering mission, and it's revealed that Mike is horribly phobic about dogs, for the same reason most phobic people have phobias-none whatsoever. With Randall, though, it would be more a matter of him wanting to protect this macho, tough-guy image and being more afraid of seeming like the mushy sort than of dogs themselves. A guy has to look after his reputaion, after all.
pitbulllady
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Maxie
Jul 1, 2005 9:00:58 GMT -5
Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 1, 2005 9:00:58 GMT -5
Pretty good and has great potential....
"Ok....for the record....I'm not afraid of dogs.....or cats....heck...I'm a Scarer for crying out loud...the best.....?? What do you mean bad-a"
Ok......ahem...I suggest this is around the time when Sullivan has Top Scarer and Randall isn't in the whole Scream Extractor business....
"....You know....Sullivan wouldn't pull me from a door....it's just not....right....heck....I was the one who got him in the factory in the first place....better me pull HIM out..."
....So anyway....good so far...
....Say...was this inspired by our fic with Boo?
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Maxie
Jul 1, 2005 10:47:22 GMT -5
Post by lizardgirl on Jul 1, 2005 10:47:22 GMT -5
Ditto about what Pitbulllady said, but sweet nonetheless. ;D
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Veg
Randall's Friend (800-1999)
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Maxie
Jul 2, 2005 22:17:37 GMT -5
Post by Veg on Jul 2, 2005 22:17:37 GMT -5
Oh...sorry.
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Maxie
Jul 3, 2005 4:13:43 GMT -5
Post by lizardgirl on Jul 3, 2005 4:13:43 GMT -5
No no no, don't worry Veg! It was a lovely piece of writing, it just needs a bit of editing here and there, that's all. No story's perfect. ;D
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Maxie
Jul 4, 2005 14:06:45 GMT -5
Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 4, 2005 14:06:45 GMT -5
Although some parts of some stories are considered perfect.... In any case, Cool's right...
Oh Cool....by the way...Ran wanted me to thank you for a review...he hasn't gotten many lately so....
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Maxie
Jul 5, 2005 11:27:34 GMT -5
Post by lizardgirl on Jul 5, 2005 11:27:34 GMT -5
Oh, it went through then? When I sent it, it came up with something about the story not existing. Good that it worked, then.
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Maxie
Jul 5, 2005 11:32:57 GMT -5
Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 5, 2005 11:32:57 GMT -5
"Not existing?.....By the way....what took ya so long?!"
Ran...
"What? It's a simple question...."
Ugh....
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Maxie
Jul 6, 2005 10:35:21 GMT -5
Post by lizardgirl on Jul 6, 2005 10:35:21 GMT -5
I hadn't looked on FF.net for a while.
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Maxie
Jul 7, 2005 11:05:40 GMT -5
Post by RandallBoggs on Jul 7, 2005 11:05:40 GMT -5
Ohh.... Well in any case, we're trying to do the best we can. Ran's finally updating his stuff and I finally am looking into working on my stuff as well....
"We updated recently by the way..."
Things are getting scarce. I was surprised YOU only got TWO reviews for your stories. Maybe rare for us, but not for you. And one of them was from me.
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Veg
Randall's Friend (800-1999)
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Maxie
Aug 8, 2005 23:09:50 GMT -5
Post by Veg on Aug 8, 2005 23:09:50 GMT -5
Okay then, here is the second chapter. I hope it's not as bad as my last chapter! Also this chapter reveals something special about the puppy. 2. A puppy in the Monster world! Randall glared down at the puppy who wagged it’s tail. Randall got down and glared at the puppy. “Listen pup, you gotta get out of here, someone is coming so get!” The puppy panted happily and wagged it’s tail. Randall opened the door and pointed to the room. “Go on! Get in!” The puppy then raced off the other direction, out of the Scarefloor into the hallway. “Oh no!” Randall yelped. He raced after the puppy. “No! Stop! Get back here!” The puppy raced in the locker room. Randall raced in to find the puppy was gone. There were many hiding place for a puppy, so he had to search everywhere. He looked through every aisle of lockers and under every stall. “Hey pup, where are you?” Something bit Randall’s tail. “OW!” Randall yelped. The puppy stood behind him, wagging it’s tail. Randall picked him up and growled. “There you are you mongrel!” The puppy’s tongue came out, trying to lick Randall’s nose. Randall held the puppy away from him. “Don’t you dare try to get your germs on me!” Randall raced back to the Scarefloor and found a horrible surprise. The puppy’s door was gone. “Oh no!” He groaned. He glared down at the puppy who squirmed in his arms. “Why did you had to come out from the door?! Don’t you know it’s a horrible crime to let a dog or cat in the Monster World?! No I guess you don’t!” The puppy wagged it’s tail. Randall made sure the coast was clear and walked off with the puppy. “Great, now I have to take you home and wait until tomorrow so anybody won’t see you! This day gets better and better doesn’t it?” Randall then saw something on the puppy. He held up the puppy to look at it’s back. One of it’s spot was shaped like an M, except in the middle of the spot was white and in the white spot was a teeny tiny black spot. The spot that the puppy had almost looked like that symbol of Monsters Inc. The M with an eye. Hey, there was this cat who had a spot that was shaped like Mickey Mouse!
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