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Post by pitbulllady on Aug 31, 2009 11:48:39 GMT -5
I'm quite surprised. This is very important if we want Randall to remain in character, and yet not even pitbulllady is giving thoughts about when everyone should contact Pixar (again, for some). As you said yourself, time is of the essence! I PM'd you back. I have not and WILL not set a deadline for someone to write a letter on THEIR OWN TIME. I encourage everyone to do so, as I have done WEEKS ago, and the sooner, the better, but since we still have a lot of people to reach, who don't know, that is the most important thing now. I have posted my fan art on my DA page, and will update my journal when I have time, but I have been working full-time now, plus overtime for which I am NOT getting paid, and I do have a home and animals to take care of when I'm not at work. I'm on my short planning time, now, otherwise I would not be allowed on the computer at work. When I have time to be creative, and not be encumbered with lesson plans, grading papers, calling parents, attending meetings and workshops, and the things that most people have to do at home as part of everyday life, things I have to catch up with when I am not at work, I will do more, but during the school year, my priority is my job, and it takes up a huge amount of time. pitbulllady
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Post by sgtyayap on Aug 31, 2009 12:20:48 GMT -5
I also PM'd you back, but I'll say it publicly as well, since my public post was not just addressed to you: I'm sorry. I guess the main reason I was so pushy just then was due to a deadline that was not even approved of (with the exception of RandallBoggs). I just thought it was a good idea, considering that density can sometimes add to the illusion.
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Post by sgtyayap on Aug 31, 2009 15:44:44 GMT -5
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Post by Theophilus Hatta on Aug 31, 2009 23:56:30 GMT -5
Eh, I'm not so good with words in formal letters...I don't think I even remember how to properly address one... Plus there's that whole paranoid social-anxiety thing I've got going on XD I could try at some point I suppose...
About your video- not very, hngh, spicy shall I say? Sorry, but it's a little dry. And not really inventive in the layout. You've got some good points, but they're thrown together kinda haphazard- for example, in the first sixty seconds you hop from his tiredness to psyching up for the day to Mike's "racist" attitude to the rigged scoreboards. Wait- what? The flow is just totally ruined that way. The way you lay out the problem isn't really clear when following the exact same movie layout.
If you rearranged the clips and presented them in ordered groups- Randall's Health, Hurting Boo?, The Big Walsoki, The Real Boss, whatevertitle- with your points, the explanation would flow much better. You could compare Mike's treatment of Boo against Randall's treatment with a series of commentated clippets from the overall movie.
And speaking of the clips- they are good, but you could really improve a few by pausing the video and circling the areas you want to point out- ie, the bags under his eyes, strapping Boo down, etc with a drawing tool or a zoom in.
Please leave the fanon out of your analysis. It detracts from your credibility as a source. Allude to the idea with hints and opinion, but let the audience draw their own conclusions. Don't tell them that he's an orphan, just point out he doesn't seem have any close friends during the movie, that no one seems to miss him after his banishment, and that no one with even a slight resemblance appears in the Play's audience. Say that an orphan or estranged son seems like a likely explanation for this and watch them think and figure out their own opinions.
Some music would be nice- what did you have before?-, just classic BGM, no words needed, would work nicely and some audio clips would really layer it. Humans tend not to pay attention to silence... and six minutes of total silence sends my brain wandering. (an opening montage of Randall would also help draw viewers in)
NOT trying to be harsh, just giving my critique on the vid.
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Post by sgtyayap on Sept 1, 2009 5:31:45 GMT -5
Eh, I'm not so good with words in formal letters... I don't think I even remember how to properly address one... Plus there's that whole paranoid social-anxiety thing I've got going on XD I could try at some point I suppose... About your video- not very, hngh, spicy shall I say? Sorry, but it's a little dry. And not really inventive in the layout. You've got some good points, but they're thrown together kinda haphazard- for example, in the first sixty seconds you hop from his tiredness to psyching up for the day to Mike's "racist" attitude to the rigged scoreboards. Wait- what? The flow is just totally ruined that way. The way you lay out the problem isn't really clear when following the exact same movie layout. If you rearranged the clips and presented them in ordered groups- Randall's Health, Hurting Boo?, The Big Walsoki, The Real Boss, whatevertitle- with your points, the explanation would flow much better. You could compare Mike's treatment of Boo against Randall's treatment with a series of commentated clippets from the overall movie. And speaking of the clips- they are good, but you could really improve a few by pausing the video and circling the areas you want to point out- ie, the bags under his eyes, strapping Boo down, etc with a drawing tool or a zoom in. Please leave the fanon out of your analysis. It detracts from your credibility as a source. Allude to the idea with hints and opinion, but let the audience draw their own conclusions. Don't tell them that he's an orphan, just point out he doesn't seem have any close friends during the movie, that no one seems to miss him after his banishment, and that no one with even a slight resemblance appears in the Play's audience. Say that an orphan or estranged son seems like a likely explanation for this and watch them think and figure out their own opinions. Some music would be nice- what did you have before?-, just classic BGM, no words needed, would work nicely and some audio clips would really layer it. Humans tend not to pay attention to silence... and six minutes of total silence sends my brain wandering. (an opening montage of Randall would also help draw viewers in) NOT trying to be harsh, just giving my critique on the vid. Sorry about the layout, but, at least for the "not evil" video, the clips were intended to be as consecutive within the movie as possible. I'll see what I can do with "clip highlighting". Removing the fandom references will be easy enough. I'll also write "may have been an orphan" instead of "was..." Finally, the music: in some versions of my video I DID have music. I decided against it though, as there have been copyright incidents involving music. I'll reconsider, though. Believe me, I can tolerate constructive criticism.
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Post by Theophilus Hatta on Sept 1, 2009 11:49:05 GMT -5
Ah, I see... OK. =D
As long as you use royalty-free music, it should be fine, legally.
That's good to know.^^ Some people are a little touchy, you know?
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Post by sgtyayap on Sept 1, 2009 16:52:19 GMT -5
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Post by galaxyofstars on Sept 1, 2009 19:11:43 GMT -5
Loved the v.5 video for "Randall is not evil". You make a good case, especially comparing Randall to Mike's attitude about humans. ... I never noticed that Waternoose was going to turn Randall in to the CDA because he said criminal singular not criminals plural (because didn't expect Mike & Sulley to have survived). Wow. How can anybody think that Randall is evil? Waternoose is awful! He double-crosses everybody, both Randall & Sullivan! Great job. The music worked great with it too.
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Post by sgtyayap on Sept 1, 2009 19:18:11 GMT -5
Thanks. Tried to lower the chance of copyright issues by using music not publicly sold anymore, in this case, from a discontinued game score.
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